December 19, 2011

Short Film: Bad At Math


I wrote a short story called Bad At Math, about me vs. gun vs. Xanax, and Henrique Cartaxo asked if he could use the idea for a short film.


 


Some differences: my bad guy was taller, the room was smaller, and my drink was WAY bigger.

Also, a follow up.






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this sucks, Alone. Don't f... (Below threshold)

December 19, 2011 6:30 PM | Posted by Anonymous: | Reply

this sucks, Alone. Don't farm out your hard work and great writing to drama school pipe heads more focused on profundity than the profound.

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why the hell is a gillette ... (Below threshold)

December 19, 2011 6:32 PM | Posted by Anonymous: | Reply

why the hell is a gillette commercial linking to the word "focused" in my comment?

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The short didn't add anythi... (Below threshold)

December 19, 2011 8:45 PM | Posted by Anonymous: | Reply

The short didn't add anything to your story.

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I thought it was a pretty i... (Below threshold)

December 19, 2011 8:51 PM | Posted by Alex: | Reply

I thought it was a pretty interesting story though I haven't read the short story yet. The short film definitely keep my attention!

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December 19, 2011 8:56 PM | Posted by Shmuel: | Reply

Something is wrong with you site - every time I enter the browser downloads automatically meld.js - twice

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I didn't have any issue wit... (Below threshold)

December 19, 2011 8:58 PM | Posted by Methossa: | Reply

I didn't have any issue with the actors or depiction, mainly just the voice acting. I didn't think it captured any of the tone that I read into it when I read it. It seemed bored at parts I thought should be energetic, and added inflection that to me stressed all the wrong words. But I guess that's always how these kind of things will be, I'm sure for someone else this may have nailed it.

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Same here...this seems like... (Below threshold)

December 19, 2011 9:31 PM | Posted, in reply to Shmuel's comment, by TheAlphaTurtle: | Reply

Same here...this seems like a new problem does everyone have it??

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Interesting... I'm wonderin... (Below threshold)

December 19, 2011 11:33 PM | Posted by ecks: | Reply

Interesting... I'm wondering, how does this narration fit with your budding all-narrators-are-liars theory?

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that was just so uninterest... (Below threshold)

December 20, 2011 12:21 AM | Posted by liza bennett: | Reply

that was just so uninteresting compared to the story you wrote.

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Just run Adblock Plus, Nosc... (Below threshold)

December 20, 2011 3:16 AM | Posted by Whatever: | Reply

Just run Adblock Plus, Noscript & Malwarebytes if it bothers you, but remember to donate to the doc.

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Riddle me this: what functi... (Below threshold)

December 20, 2011 4:27 AM | Posted by Guy Fox: | Reply

Riddle me this: what function does the voiceover serve in this short film, given your theory? Unconscious rationalization or conscious deception?
It's also interesting how, since you pretty consistently write about 'American' problems, you seem to be received so well among Europeans. Pourquoi?

As for the execution of the film, if you don't like it, complain to Senor Cartaxo. Alone did his thing, and Henrique did his own. I really missed the element of the waiting room, though. With the faceless patients present outside the office in the story, there was a really interesting triangle between rational-calculating-doctor-nurse-Weberian-bureaucratic-authority, arithmetically-challenged-to-the-point-of-batshit-crazy-Juan, and apathetic-collective-of-self-absorbed-society-drones. In the film, this pretty much gets reduced to a battle of individual wills, mano-a-mano, so to speak. So instead of 'The Last Emperor', you pretty much get 'The Quick and the Dead'. Meh.

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>Senhor CartaxoFTF... (Below threshold)

December 20, 2011 6:47 AM | Posted, in reply to Guy Fox's comment, by Anonymous: | Reply

>Senhor Cartaxo

FTFY

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Great short movie!Go... (Below threshold)

December 20, 2011 7:30 AM | Posted by Boizão: | Reply

Great short movie!
Gongratulations Cartaxo and all the crew!!

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The director didn't capture... (Below threshold)

December 20, 2011 7:54 AM | Posted by AlanJohsnon: | Reply

The director didn't capture the tone of the short story all that well and he doesn't understand perspective, which is why he ends on the patient outside, afterwards. He's got the current dslr look down it seems though.

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It's also interesting ho... (Below threshold)

December 20, 2011 9:01 AM | Posted by Anonymous: | Reply

It's also interesting how, since you pretty consistently write about 'American' problems, you seem to be received so well among Europeans. Pourquoi?

He's well received by this particular European because I'm not particularly educated, and I consider his articles to be the college lectures I never had.

While the slant might seem anti-American, it seems to me more like "anti ignorance & anti bullshit" of the kind you can find everywhere and anywhere.

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I like it.... (Below threshold)

December 20, 2011 11:56 AM | Posted by JohnJ: | Reply

I like it.

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Doc was with the ring on hi... (Below threshold)

December 20, 2011 12:31 PM | Posted by ed: | Reply

Doc was with the ring on his hand...it wasn't a dream after all.

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What does it mean if you li... (Below threshold)

December 20, 2011 2:50 PM | Posted by Off topic: | Reply

What does it mean if you like the "Hangover" films and you are female?

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Well, I really liked the sh... (Below threshold)

December 20, 2011 5:21 PM | Posted by lorg: | Reply

Well, I really liked the short story, it made an impression. So much so that when you linked to it, I knew what you were linking to without clicking. Although I think the short film has some stuff going for it, it doesn't really capture the essence of the story. It does have the right "feel" though.

But the reason I really came to comment here (for the first time!), was because of the narration. I noticed other commenters noticed that as well, and what really amused me was the way you changed the way I look at stories now: what does he want to be true?

Well, I think that in this short film, what strikes me is that the doctor/narrator wants it to be true that he's doing some small evil and "manages" that patient in order to save all the other people around.
It seems to me the doctor/narrator wants it to be true that we (the audience) would think that his cynical and 'outside' worldview leads him to drink - which signifies that he also can't handle it - he's also a good guy crushed by the burden of reality.

It might be true. I don't know. It sure was worth watching. It made me think.

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Wait, was it all fictional ... (Below threshold)

December 21, 2011 2:04 AM | Posted by Or: | Reply

Wait, was it all fictional to begin with? Does that just make "Observations Afterwards" a sequel with a different genre?

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Whatever: ads are one thing... (Below threshold)

December 21, 2011 5:25 AM | Posted by maha: | Reply

Whatever: ads are one thing, shady javascript is another. Not acceptable.

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maha: Yes, I agree but thos... (Below threshold)

December 21, 2011 7:12 AM | Posted by Whatever: | Reply

maha: Yes, I agree but those usually stem from the ad companies themselves not the website boss. Usually. Lets find out first.

If the script is really from the doc we can still tar and feather him. :)

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"the 'book' was better"... (Below threshold)

December 22, 2011 4:16 AM | Posted by Francis: | Reply

"the 'book' was better"

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December 22, 2011 9:38 AM | Posted by SusanC: | Reply

Ok, I liked the film.

Too much voice-over is sometimes a weakness in film ("show, not tell"), but it goes well with the other film noir conventions in this piece (the disillusioned, outsider anti-hero protagonist is here a psychiatrist rather than the usual Raymond Chandler private investigator, but the principle is the same).

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One thing I find interestin... (Below threshold)

December 23, 2011 7:40 AM | Posted by Rooster: | Reply

One thing I find interesting is that Alone (here in the blog) is completely comfortable with his physical depiction in the movie -- body frame, apparent age, movement style. Most people who become the subjects of fiction always express some unease, even if in good mood, about how different the actor who played them really is from the way they move their hands or their intonation of questions, etc -- the first chance they get.

Hypothesis: Cartaxo is in Europe, clearly. Is Alone an expat living in, say, Austria?

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If you go and read the comm... (Below threshold)

December 23, 2011 4:00 PM | Posted by maha: | Reply

If you go and read the comments for the original "Bad At Math", there's actually a heavily downvoted comment by "Cartaxo" asking to use the story in a short film. Heh.

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Unless Alone is Cartaxo.</p... (Below threshold)

December 23, 2011 5:20 PM | Posted, in reply to Rooster's comment, by There Is No Alone: | Reply

Unless Alone is Cartaxo.

Seriously, I'd bet you could have cast Alone as a trannie and he wouldn't have cared.

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He care enough about the si... (Below threshold)

December 25, 2011 6:35 AM | Posted, in reply to There Is No Alone's comment, by Rooster: | Reply

He care enough about the size of his assailant.

And heck, if you're going to be played by a tranny or a guy of a different ethnicity, you're able to say "well, this is a portrayal of a fictionalized someone who's very different from me". If you're played by someone that's similar to you, then the differences in the baldness patterns and eye movements and so on become grating.

What I meant to imply by "is Alone in Europe" was "is it Alone playing Dr. Loneman?".

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That must have been a harro... (Below threshold)

December 26, 2011 9:39 PM | Posted by PsyMatAsia: | Reply

That must have been a harrowing experience. It's a miracle no one got hurt.

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I liked it. I thought it wa... (Below threshold)

February 19, 2012 9:04 AM | Posted by Anthony: | Reply

I liked it. I thought it was well written.

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that happened to me once wh... (Below threshold)

February 19, 2012 3:20 PM | Posted, in reply to Anonymous's comment, by ginnygeneva@gmail.com: | Reply

that happened to me once when I downloaded some kind of media player from the internet. after that, certain words of whatever i posted anywhere got emphasized and if you clicked on them you got taken hrough to advertisements. i managed to fix it myself though

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February 19, 2012 5:13 PM | Posted, in reply to Anonymous's comment, by Anthony: | Reply

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I like it. That kids a real... (Below threshold)

June 27, 2012 11:24 AM | Posted by Virus expert: | Reply

I like it. That kids a really strong actor and constantly intense.

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November 7, 2012 9:09 AM | Posted by resume services review: | Reply

If you can't figure it out, I saved the link to fix it. I ended up having to contact somebody from their 'company' (I guess you'd call it) since the instructions they lay out on their website didn't work for me. Here's the link

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He need to improve his skil... (Below threshold)

May 11, 2013 7:10 PM | Posted by Anonymous: | Reply

He need to improve his skills at reading. It's not all about math.

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Saw this horrifying story a... (Below threshold)

July 24, 2014 10:37 PM | Posted by the executive monkey: | Reply

Saw this horrifying story and immediately thought of TLP: http://www.delcotimes.com/general-news/20140724/doctor-fires-back-at-suspect-in-fatal-shooting-at-mercy-fitzgerald-hospital

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I identify with this video ... (Below threshold)

July 25, 2014 12:22 PM | Posted by Anonymous: | Reply

I identify with this video in several ways, mostly its title.

The last couple of weeks I've been confused. Thought it would change but it intensified. Guess we are advised to direct our attention forward for good reasons.

Not a humble attitude, I guess. Should have prioritized math at an earlier age, I guess.

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I too wonder what kind of m... (Below threshold)

July 25, 2014 12:40 PM | Posted by Anonymous: | Reply

I too wonder what kind of math people use.

I imagine remembering someone that seemingly wanted me to become a better person. Perhaps I'm clueless but it seemed so complicated and technical - so much education. I might be a fool but it could have been so easy. It might be that I got it wrong, but I remember that I felt an outline of a mind as it touched me. Not detailed, not what it told me itself, but something indescribable and only to be felt. I knew that I couldn't say anything, that no-one was really listening and that change could only be achieved through patience.

Still, while being filled by that sensation of knowing someone I was torn apart by doubt. Someone could be playing me, though I doubted but then again I'm slow so if that were the case I wouldn't know, would I? Doubting myself lead to doubting others lead to whatever I don't know, no clue.

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Pre-nursery-school satire b... (Below threshold)

July 25, 2014 1:08 PM | Posted by Guido Perdido: | Reply

Pre-nursery-school satire by post-irony hipster, imagining self brilliant and all-seeing while blind and cretinous. But fancy new gear and quite the well-stocked cupboard.

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